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I like it, and would read more! I do like creepy stories, so it’s a win, for me! 🙂
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Thank you!!
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The beauty of a story such as this is it opens up one’s imagination to get answers to the so many unanswered ones.
From the point of view of literary criticism might I suggest that a story such as this which is hitting the reader in the eyes so rapidly needs to contain only those bits which achieve that. For example, in this bit: “”As we stepped closer for a better look, we realized, “” you could leave out “for a better look” as it would be understood the act of stepping closer would result in a ‘better look’….if that makes sense…..I also think you need not repeat words such as “noticed” in one sentence. Those are two things that struck me about this exerpt.
Of course the story behind the ‘blank eyes’ would be fascinating to read. So I hope my feedback is ok, writing is such fun and I agree ones imagination no matter how ‘crazy’ it might appear does need to be shared near and far.
Have a great day.
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Thank you for taking time to comment. I enjoy writing and feedback from others is always welcome!!!
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Well thanks you never know how people might react.
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That is so very true–
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I love the suspense and creepy stories! Keep writing! Maybe if you did different parts and released a part/chapter every week? If you know what I mean. That would be so fun
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that sounds like a great idea!
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